rette stil :)

Giv mige lige lidt tid så fixer jeg den :)

and to swin with beautiful fishes
der skulle vidst stå swim

Efter skiing foreslår jeg et semikolon

I know all human beings looks ahead ( SLET S i LOOKS!)

Det er alle fejl .... (Jeg har været i england 4 mdr, så ;) ) God fornøjelse :)

+ der er nogle gramatiske fejl.

f.eks.
1.
And the many impression you got

skal nok være
And the many impression you get

2.
and not to forget the overwhelming sight of blue, pink or whatever a colour you like, there almost is a fish in that colour.

Den sætning lyder helt forkert.

3.
and i liked it

"I" staves altid med stort I

4.
+ der er en del komma fejl

og så skulle det være et svar :o)

Jeg har lige et par ting mere. Jeg har rettet fejlene og sat en parentes ind bagefter med en * i. Plus en lille forklaring til hver "fejl".

Just right now I haven’t got a real burning ambition. Okay, (*Komma) you always have a dream for the future. My dream now is to take a long trip to another exciting (*sæt et "c" ind efter "x") country in the world, maybe Australia or Thailand, Malaysia, France,  etc. Because I think it could be (* her mangler du et ord: be) very (*slet kommaet her) exciting (*igen skal du have et "c" i "exciting"). But I don’t know, because I have only heard it from other young people. My big burning dream (*slet komma her) is to swim with the BIG sharks in a cage, and to swin with beautiful fishes! The reason for the last wish is that it could be so nice, so cool and so beautiful to swim in the clear blue water, and (*and med lille) the only sound you hear is you own breath. And the many impressions (* s på i flertal) you get (*nutid i stedet for datid) and not to forget the overwhelming sight of blue, pink or whatever a colour you like, there almost is a fish in that colour. (*hele den sætning bør du nok lige kigge på og omformulere).
I have tried to dive before, not in the real ocean only in a swimming pool and in a swimming bath, and I (*Husk "I" med stort) liked it. It was so cool when the only sound you could hear was you own breath (*væk med e'et i breath). You can’t imagine the big experience before you have tried it!. It’s so fantastic when you are down in the water and you don’t always need to swim to the surface to get new fresh air. You can just stay down under and enjoy the good feeling.



I just have one wish, right now! And that is to win a good price in the lottery, because my computer is  destroyed, and I (*I med stort igen!) really need a new!


Hvis jeg lige skal komme med en generel kommentar, så skal du måske lige kigge på, om der skal være flere sammentrækninger, men det er altsammen noget der afhænger af, hvad din lærer i det hele taget siger til sammentrækninger. Jeg mener blot, at hvis du alligevel bruger det nogen steder, så gør det mere konsekvent. Men som regel er det mest i talesprog, at man benytter sig af sammentrækninger. På skrift er det i de fleste tilfælde bedst at skrive alle ordene fuldt ud. Men spørg din lærer, hvis han/hun ikke selv kommenterer det.

thx !