23. oktober 2005 - 22:24Der er
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Engelsk, forstår i ?
Jeg er blevet stillet til opgave at formulere mit kortvarint (300-400) ord. Jeg skal "summere" en tekst, så en læser der IKKE har læst teksten forstår det primære i den..
Forstår i ? Eventuelle rettelser er yderst velkomne..
The main subject in this text is luxury and freedom. Many people talk about this, wouldn’t it be nice? Just imagine, everyday, no commitments, no plans, nothing! But when it comes to all and you suddenly have the opportunity for this, its not really that nice anyway. Dorte Werner, 33, has recently moved to Hong-Kong together with her husband, and 2 children aged 2½ and 6. The year was planned to be sort of an ‘investment’ year for saving up to a new house. At their arrival they hired a so-called ‘maid’ to take care of all the daily needs, shopping etc. In the beginning it all went fine, and she really liked being independent. But she soon realizes that she has nothing to do at all, she’s completely bored. She just can’t go to sleep without having a strategically plan for the upcoming day. Dorte has always been convinced that she never would be a housewife, but when she got offered the Hong-Kong post she couldn’t refuse. She thought it would be nice with some ‘breathing space’. Then after several months the feeling of being superfluous hits Dorthe, she no longer feels that there is a need for her, what’s her main task? Nothing, she’s no longer a link in the chain. She tries to compensate by shopping, then she at least feels that she is doing something, but it’s certainly not healthy for the finances. Nearly all Danes live by the quote “No pain, no gain” therefore she finds it extremely hard to grasp this new lifestyle, “It’s degrading not to have your own income”. And she really wants to promote that she has been an export-engineer, but in Hong-Kong, it doesn’t matter. The male role is the leading role; your past identity is no longer valid. Dorthe missed the kick and thrill in her everyday life, she first found it when she got the part time job at the Danish general consul. She ends by saying “It’s difficult suddenly having all that spare time you’ve always dreamed about”
Men skulle det ikke have været "... luxury of freedom."? Ud fra beskrivelsen så handler teksten ikke om at være rig, men om ikke at have nogen bindinger.
Dorte Werner, 33, has recently moved to Hong-Kong together with her husband. jeg havde nok udeladt together. therefore she finds it extremely hard to grasp this new lifestyle. Der havde jeg nok skrevet "that's why" istedet for "Therefore". she first found it when she got the part time job at the Danish general consul. I denne sætning havde jeg nok skrevet "She finally found it..." hvis det kan bruges, det er en lidt søgt rettelse. Men jeg forstår hel fint teksten;)
Jeg kan ikke sætte noget virkeligt seriøst på grannatikken - men det kan jo bare skyldes at jeg ikke ved bedre.
Du bør dog rette:
"The main subject in this text is luxury and freedom"
- til:
"The main subject of this text is luxury and freedom"
Endvidere bør du undgå at skrive "its" idet dette er talesporg (skriv i stedet "it is"). Eneste undtakesle fra dette er hvor at du citerer Dorthe. Her er det jo netop i orden med talesprog.
Der er også lidt med tiderne: "In the beginning it all went fine..." er datid, men umiddelbart derefter "But she soon realizes that ..." som ikke er datid mere (jeg kan desværre ikke huske hvad denne form hedder). Du bør bruge den samme tid over hele linjen.
"... but when she got offered the Hong-Kong post she couldn’t refuse ..."
Det lyder nu mere som om at det er manden som har fået tilbudt noget og at hun blot har fulgt med. Desuden lyder "... she couldn’t refuse ..." bare en lille smule af noget med gangstere (men det er nok bare min syglige fantasi ;^)
-- men du skal vel også holde dig til den rigtige tid igennem dokumentet, og der skal det meste vel være datid:
In the beginning it all went fine, and she really liked being independent. But she soon realized that she had nothing to do at all, she was completely bored. She just can’t go to sleep without having a ...
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